美国外教老师Debby为Iris（三年级）小朋友录制的视频点评：
这篇作文的题目是“Summer Vacation”
Iris 的小朋友英文作文原文如下：
Summer Vocation
Last summer vocation we went to desert. Mom, dad and I found fun there.
First ，we rode camel. There was no plants no trees and no flowers. There was just sand. Mom and I rode one camel. Dad rode another. Mom took a photo of me.
Next, we went sand sledding. We chose tall hills so that speed got fast. I rode my pink sled down the sand hill many times. We tried many tall hills. Dad tried hill that was very steep and on the ends of had another hill ! That was cool.
Last, we looked at the sky andd the stars, of course we look at the moon too! I was surprised that house’s was white because the moonlight. It is realy beautiful!
I was excited and happy to visit to the dessert. Maybe I will come next summer vocation.
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