这是美国外教老师Debby为小学生Luke录制的作文修改视频点评：
Luke 的本次英文作文题目是“Chinese New Year”

Luke feedback gr 3-5 lesson 2.mp4 (19.2MB) Luke 的作文原文：

Chinese New Year - By Luke

I have a happy festival at 2018. I was in market with my mom and dad. The market was at Guang Zhou.

I and my mom were shop on that market for my birthday. My dad and I were eat dinner, after dinner we play with our fireworks. Then we ated my birthday cake with my mom. We played with my legos, ( blocks), but my dad didn’t know how to make a tank. So I has to help him to finish building legos. At last we readed books and floded air planes, my mom said, “let’s go to bed” .

I had a wonderful night in my whole life! I wish I could have another present for my holidays and Chinese New Year is my favorite holiday.