以下是2020年1月6号美国外教Debby老师录制的视频，她在视频中详细修改并点评了已提交的三份 3-5 年级小学生作文：

第一份是 三年级的Iris的作文“Summer Vacation”

Iris feedback gr 3-5 lesson 2.mp4 (16.02MB)

Iris 的英文作文原文如下：

Summer Vocation

Last summer vocation we went to desert. Mom, dad and I found fun there.

First ，we rode camel. There was no plants no trees and no flowers. There was just sand. Mom and I rode one camel. Dad rode another. Mom took a photo of me.

Next, we went sand sledding. We chose tall hills so that speed got fast. I rode my pink sled down the sand hill many times. We tried many tall hills. Dad tried hill that was very steep and on the ends of had another hill ! That was cool.

Last, we looked at the sky andd the stars, of course we look at the moon too! I was surprised that house’s was white because the moonlight. It is realy beautiful!

I was excited and happy to visit to the dessert. Maybe I will come next summer vocation.

第二份是小学生Luke 的英文作文“Chinese New Year”

Luke feedback gr 3-5 lesson 2.mp4 (19.2MB) Luke 的作文原文：

Chinese New Year - By Luke

I have a happy festival at 2018. I was in market with my mom and dad. The market was at Guang Zhou.

I and my mom were shop on that market for my birthday. My dad and I were eat dinner, after dinner we play with our fireworks. Then we ated my birthday cake with my mom. We played with my legos, ( blocks), but my dad didn’t know how to make a tank. So I has to help him to finish building legos. At last we readed books and floded air planes, my mom said, “let’s go to bed” .

I had a wonderful night in my whole life! I wish I could have another present for my holidays and Chinese New Year is my favorite holiday.

第三份是小学生Judith的英文作文“The New Years Eve”

Judith feedback Gr 3-5 Lesson 2.mp4 (14.96MB) Judith 的作文原文：

The New Years Eve - By Judith

When it was the New Year Eve. I was super excited. When I was at grandma’s house I got to set fireworks with my little brother.

My little brothere is very cute. He likes to be silly. He makes me laugh a lot. When we had loud fireworks. They made me jump.

I and my little brother watched TV too. I had to dump the fire. It is a tradition.

Then I hung the lantern on little and big trees. The garden was the gimmering with red light. We had a good year.